表达语汇(三)


(四)动词形式不正确

考生容易犯的错误还有对动词在不同地方使用的形式把握不清,有的应该使用动名词的,却直接用了动词原形,有的应该使用过去分词的,却是用了动名词。考生需注意以下几点:固定搭配中的动词形式;动名词或动词不定式可以作主语;不同时态、语态中的动词形式。虚拟语气也是写作中容易出错的地方,主要是由于考生在写作中没有使用虚拟语气的意识。所以,在平时考生应该加强对虚拟语气的了解,注意虚拟语气中动词的使用。

 

1、Original: So take all the above factors into account,I may not quite agree with the opinion that parents are our best teaches.

   RevisedSo,taking all of the above factors into account,I do not agree with the opinion that parents are our best teachers.

本段开头的so take all… 本应该是伴随状语成分,但作者直接用了动词原形,这是错误的,应该和主句的主语I保持逻辑一致,是作者把以上的因素考虑在内的。除此以外,原句中作者为能明确表明自己的立场,把may not quite agree改为do not agree。

 

2、Original:We can enjoy the art of cuisine in cooking rather than tolerating the time-consuming preparation.

  Revised: We can enjoy the art of cooking rather than simply tolerate the time-consuming preparation.

rather than的前后用此应保持一致,此处rather than后的用词要与其前面的动词原形enjoy保持一致,故将tolerating改为tolerate。原句中还有一个用此问题,cuisine本意为“烹饪”,与in cooking冲突,故只保留一个cooking即可。

 

3、OriginalDrink water with hygiene will certainly benefit the local folks a lot.

   RevisedDrinking clean water will certainly benefit the local population.

原句动名词作主语,将drink该为drinking。原句中还有词汇表达问题:干净的水用clean water表达恰当,不用water with hygiene。

 

4、Original:The rapid development of science and technology has lead to an increasing need for more relaxation in off-work time.

   Revised:The rapid development of modern economies has led to an increasing need for more relaxation in off-work time.

原句中lead在现在完成时中应该用过去分词,应该为led。

 

5、Original:CCTV 10 is such a channel intended to teach people...

   Revised:CCTV 10 is a channe that teaches people...

原句中的intend不应用过去分词的形式。

 

6、Original:They keep focused on money while friends and families slip away.

   Revised:They keep focusing on money while friends and families slip away.

focus(聚焦、集中于)此处应该用动名词形式,keep doing“一直做某事”,keep focusing on。

 

(五)名词的单复数、冠词的使用

 

1、Original:a even brighter future

   Revised:an even brighter future

even是以元音因素开头的,所以用不定冠词an。

 

2、Original:I often watch TV with my father when there is a NBA game.

   Revised:I often watch TV with my father when there is an NBA game.

字母N是以元音因素(e)开头的,故用不定冠词an。

 

3、Original:Additionally getting a job will enrich their experience and build up their resume,better preparing them for the future career.

  Revised:Additionally getting a job will enrich their experience and build up their resume,better preparing them for future careers.

原句中是指“他们(年轻人)未来的事业”,这些人将来会有所不同的事业,故career要变复数;将来的事业此处不是特指,不需要加定冠词the。

 

(六)用词与文章风格不符

在托福作为写作中,应避免使用口语化的词或表达,如俚语、省略表达(can't);也应该避免使用概念较大或者学术性的词或表达。

 

1、Original:It is in intelligence that makes people successful and earn large sum of bucks and gain great reputation!

   Revised:So,I believe it is intelligence that leads to success in terms of financial wealth and reputation.

buck有“美元”的意思,但这是一种非常不正式的说法。在写作中所使用的语言要注意整体的风格,如果在正式的写作中出现及其口语化或俚语化的词语,会让阅卷者感到很突兀。

 

2、Original:The international banks are cognizant of the new law's significance.

   Revised:The international banks are aware of the new law'significance.

cognizant是十分正式的词(属于jargon),此处用aware即可,在托福写作中,要避免使用属于性质的词。